Hey, just got done reading your fanfic. I think you know where your weaknesses are in your grammar, so don't worry too much about it. Also, there is going to be a grammatic change in the characters speech because you're capturing their "slang". I have not played FF13-2, but I have played up to 13. All in all its pretty good! Will you be joining the RP that is starting soon? Keep up the writing. Thesauraus' aren't dinosaurs.