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PostedMar 28, 2013 6:30 pm   Last edited by ckdragonck on Apr 03, 2013 1:10 am. Edited 3 times in total

FLAMEDANCER

Act I: Birth
Table of Contents:

Act I: Birth

- Episode 1: My Heart Lies With You
- - Chapter 1: The Adventuress
- - Chapter 2: The Flamedancer
- - Chapter 3: The Informant
- - Chapter 4: The Friend

- Episode 2: Origins
- - Chapter 1: The Discovery
- - Chapter 2: The Truth
- - Chapter 3: The Lie
- - Chapter 4: The Treasure

Act II: Rebirth
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PostedMar 28, 2013 6:32 pm   Last edited by ckdragonck on Apr 03, 2013 1:12 am. Edited 1 time in total

The Adventuress

[E1C1]
The end is always nearer than you think, but worry not: Every end forms an even greater beginning.

A searing moan escaped the victim's throat.

"Where's the Chief Medic?! We have a molten mess here!"

"I'm right here! Move her to the pod - we have no choice!"

"Her vitals can't even be placed; how is she alive?! Her body is a wreck!"

"Pay attention! I need all the trainees at the controls. Make sure the pod is working right!"

"Everything is ready! Are you sure this will work?"

"It most likely won't."

--

Rezilia felt a breath - something she believed would never be a part of her again. The stunt she pulled was a suicide mission of her own volition. The fire cells... She had to finish the fire cells...

"So you're awake? That was quite a stunt you pulled back there. You're a Neo-Human yet you managed to take down a King Volcano Beetle. Even for Rezilia the Adventuress, that was an act of pure stupidity."

Rezilia spoke with a raspy, burnt voice, "Did it succeed?"

The Chief Medic sighed. "Yes, the fire cells have been properly manufactured. Your Arkana 'daughter' will be ready in two months."

This made the Adventuress grin from ear to ear. "I'm glad."

Five minutes later, her heart stopped. Rezilia perished, fully at ease.

--

No one told the newborn Arkana how special she was for years. She grew up with odd ailments: always being far too cold, unable to concentrate for the most part, and able to handle the hottest of temperatures. She could not explain her dilemma herself and her superiors would not tell her the truth.

As time passed, the Arkana became the fifth in her class, despite the fact that being a Whipper meant being in full control of one's actions. Her ailments never ceased to distract her; she wished for just one chance to find out why she was so different from everyone else and so cursed to feel pain at every waking moment.

In the last year of Arkana training, a full-scale battle broke out between the Academy's students. Everyone had gone wild for a reason Muyai could not understand: Sparkles of stardust filled the air. The large quantity affected everyone other than herself. Arkana were killing each other left and right. She knew she had to do something.

The most dangerous of the students - the top ten - were killing the majority of those in the area. Muyai faced them - head to head - until she had knocked out all but the star of the Academy. A new Punisher-Medic hybrid, Jinette was already mad with power even before the incident. Sensing her prey, Jinette unleashed a flurry of attacks at Muyai.

Barely dodging them, Muyai managed to close the distance between then two and wound Jinette enough to cause her to pass out but not before the Dual Cannoneer blasted Muyai with a high-priority stun. Seeing weakness, the other students grouped around Muyai. She could do nothing but watch as their evil grins turned to constant attacks.

Muyai felt her body being sliced apart. At the same time, screams filled her ears. Everyone around her was burning in a blazing inferno. Her blood kept leaking out across the floor. Was it truly blood? To her it looked like lava, consuming anyone that touched it. The large screen near the top of the coliseum centered on Muyai alone. She was not an Arkana, she was something else - living fire!

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PostedMar 29, 2013 7:07 am
I'm liking the direction of this story so far, and the way you organized the chapters will make it much easier to find the chapters where i last read (Once the chapters became more numerous.).

Though i am slightly confused in the beginning; what was Rezilia trying to achieve, getting fire cells from a volcano beetle, and what did the medic mean by Arkana Daughter?

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PostedMar 29, 2013 4:36 pm
Oh this is quite interesting.
Not bad.. Though well I shouldn't criticize considering the fact that my own writing skill are quite bad. Despite actually wanting to write something..(considering writing some fanfic after I gotten to play Scarlet blade some more)
Well anyways it's pretty good ^^.

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PostedMar 29, 2013 4:46 pm
This is quite good but I can't keep but wonder as to why would she risk her life to collect "fire cells"

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PostedMar 29, 2013 6:00 pm   Last edited by ckdragonck on Apr 03, 2013 1:14 am. Edited 1 time in total
michaelxushi wrote:
Oh this is quite interesting.
Not bad.. Though well I shouldn't criticize considering the fact that my own writing skill are quite bad. Despite actually wanting to write something..(considering writing some fanfic after I gotten to play Scarlet blade some more)
Well anyways it's pretty good ^^.  


Trust me, with some cases of terrible grammar I've seen... I'm pretty sure you'd do a great story with how good your grammar is now.

WarriorWomenFTW wrote:
I'm liking the direction of this story so far, and the way you organized the chapters will make it much easier to find the chapters where i last read (Once the chapters became more numerous.).

Though i am slightly confused in the beginning; what was Rezilia trying to achieve, getting fire cells from a volcano beetle, and what did the medic mean by Arkana Daughter?  


*spoilers ahead* *read Chapter 2 for simpler insight*

Rezilia got the cells of various Volcano Beetles for research into their structure and how they manage to create a creature of fire/lava. This research was used to develop "fire cells" meant to create a new kind of Arkana. However, this was so tricky that Neo-Human DNA and cells from a King Volcano Beetle were needed to create the perfect fire cells. Muyai was then cloned from those finished cells. Since the NH DNA was Rezilia's, she can be considered Muyai's biological mother whereas that King Volcano Beetle is her father. Her mother killed her father to make her. Interesting, right?


As for the purpose of Muyai's existence, that'll be explained as the story goes on. AKA as to why Rezilia risked her life to create Muyai.




Thanks for the replies, everyone! ^^ The chapters should (hopefully) be longer from here on out.

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PostedMar 30, 2013 3:09 am
Hahaha lolz.
Nice explanation about the fire cell.
Though going ahead and revealing it in a comment instead of the chapters themselves is maybe a bit much >.<
But well I'm happy that you did write it as it cleared the confusion and questions about why Rezilia went ahead and risked her life for the "fire cells".

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PostedMar 30, 2013 9:21 am
Actually, I just said such a thing in the first chapter. You just have to read carefully and use...





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PostedMar 31, 2013 11:01 am
Oh yea I forgot to ask before..
But how do you link your own post?

Because in the future when I create something, I will most likely post it in several posts in the thread. And having a link on the very first one to each chapter would be very helpful.
Though atm I don't know how to do that....

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PostedMar 31, 2013 11:31 am
At the bottom of every post, there is a Link To This Post button. It'll change the page's URL. Just copy that URL.
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