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romanshatalov

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PostedJun 07, 2012 11:41 pm   Last edited by romanshatalov on Jun 08, 2012 9:32 pm. Edited 1 time in total

The Human Syndrome

Poem I took the time to write
I wrote this poem while I was bored in class one day.

‎* The Human Syndrome *
Violence abused my past, I chose to glance, look back and see what truths have passed, left dying in the hours as they skewed my grasp on what these nooses grab what these vultures peck from my flesh and as I disect my respect to see who new in that I find no one really cares about who's who, its sad, looking for money, for insanity and ruthless acts, finding grumbling old abusive hacks that think life is intruding camps and bruising caps punches and kicks lead to gunplay with kids, some say its sick, while other just choose to laugh, see the world crumbling under blue kids flags, or drowning in the blood from necks of those who we bash complaining of corruption in the goverment when corruption gave them power. Who did that? Cast the ballet, placing there votes in idiots expecting not to get screwed with that the rich fighting the poor, the sick fighting for more of something that they shouldnt have to pursue, should have, the dead piling up while we just point to the blue in maps, looking for somewhere new to stack the what we dont want, everything crude, the trash, the old are forgotten while the new attack every attempt to relieve this truth we have, end this truce we have with the powers that break our world,made our pearl into something we all hate. We all made this planet into this ball of ****, paradise in space, and yet sitting here can we really call it this? Can we say with our godly image we made all this sick with our "accomplishments"? Poisoning our land, our sea, our lives the air we breath, turning all we see into cities that scape our sky to dust, more metal in our scenery then if we made our eyes from rust...
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PostedJun 08, 2012 4:29 am
I love reading other peoples hard work, I can really see the time you spend writing this poem. Well done mate, I would love to read some more of your work.


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PostedJun 09, 2012 10:25 am

Re: The Human Syndrome

Poem I took the time to write
romanshatalov wrote:
I wrote this poem while I was bored in class one day.

‎* The Human Syndrome *
Violence abused my past, I chose to glance, look back and see what truths have passed, left dying in the hours as they skewed my grasp on what these nooses grab what these vultures peck from my flesh and as I disect my respect to see who new in that I find no one really cares about who's who, its sad, looking for money, for insanity and ruthless acts, finding grumbling old abusive hacks that think life is intruding camps and bruising caps punches and kicks lead to gunplay with kids, some say its sick, while other just choose to laugh, see the world crumbling under blue kids flags, or drowning in the blood from necks of those who we bash complaining of corruption in the goverment when corruption gave them power. Who did that? Cast the ballet, placing there votes in idiots expecting not to get screwed with that the rich fighting the poor, the sick fighting for more of something that they shouldnt have to pursue, should have, the dead piling up while we just point to the blue in maps, looking for somewhere new to stack the what we dont want, everything crude, the trash, the old are forgotten while the new attack every attempt to relieve this truth we have, end this truce we have with the powers that break our world,made our pearl into something we all hate. We all made this planet into this ball of ****, paradise in space, and yet sitting here can we really call it this? Can we say with our godly image we made all this sick with our "accomplishments"? Poisoning our land, our sea, our lives the air we breath, turning all we see into cities that scape our sky to dust, more metal in our scenery then if we made our eyes from rust...  


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PostedJun 09, 2012 2:25 pm
I really enjoyed reading this, it has been a long time since I've read some well-made poem in english from a random person, and the intelligent writing there is really impressive. I most ask you one thing - Did you mix up the world where we live with playing WolfTeam? Anyway, I enjoyed it so keep it up and whenever you have some spare time or you're bored in an english class or something, try and do some more of this kind of art that really impresses me.

Kudus for you. :3

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PostedJun 10, 2012 6:10 am
Nicely done,hope will see more poems from you in the fututre ^.^

romanshatalov

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PostedJun 11, 2012 5:23 pm
Dubblew wrote:
I really enjoyed reading this, it has been a long time since I've read some well-made poem in english from a random person, and the intelligent writing there is really impressive. I most ask you one thing - Did you mix up the world where we live with playing WolfTeam? Anyway, I enjoyed it so keep it up and whenever you have some spare time or you're bored in an english class or something, try and do some more of this kind of art that really impresses me.

Kudus for you. :3  


Yes, some of the poem was actually inspired by Wolfteam.

romanshatalov

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PostedJun 11, 2012 5:24 pm
Sebster18 wrote:
Nicely done,hope will see more poems from you in the fututre ^.^  

I will be adding more poems like this in the future whenever I get the time to write them.
Thanks for the positive feedback. Very Happy

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