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PostedJan 06, 2012 10:36 pm   Last edited by NobaNSoda on Jan 16, 2012 12:24 pm. Edited 3 times in total

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My LO Fan Fic
THIS IS ONLY A FAN FICTION! I HAVE NOT PLAYED LIME YET BUT REALLY HOPE TO VERY SOON! I HAVE MADE UP ALL THE CHARACTERS, BERRIES, AND ANYTHING WITH A FUN SOUNDING NAME! LOL HOW EVER I DID USE THE BATTLE CLASSES AND TRADE CLASSES.

I HOPE YOU ENJOY MY TALE. ONE OF FOUR UNLIKELY FRIENDS WHO CROSS PATHS IN UNLIKELY WAYS.

Months:
January=Jumbulary
February=Frapulary
March=Mach
April=Apple
May=Mango
June=Jumble
July=Jelly
August=Aproch
September=Salmon
October=Octopi
November=Novoli
December=Decho


Character Colors:
Night is Cyan
Jewels is Red
Kai is Green
Zane is Blue
Miika is Pink
Ziva is Purple








*Sorry for any confusion friends xD

Night is a Character in my story. He is a Turga (of course) and his father wants him to learn the ways of the Thief. There for Night is forbidden to have anything to do with being a Tailor, something he wants more than anything.

Jewels is a female Muris character in this story. She is Mr.Low's Daughter, and loves being a Cleric. However she also bakes delicious cakes on her free time.

Zane is perhaps the hardest human for Night to get along with. (But I can't Spoil what happened just yet) o.- so keep reading!

Kai, being a human, is cautious around the Turga, and we will see what happens from there xD Enjoy their Tale
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PostedJan 06, 2012 10:39 pm   Last edited by NobaNSoda on Jan 16, 2012 12:30 pm. Edited 3 times in total

Chapter1

Chapter one: A Turga is Born

Decho 15th 1991

An uncommonly cold day in Decho a baby turga opened his eyes for the first time. His long ears twitched, and adoring awes came from all around. However, no one really knew the challenges he would over come, or the battles he would lead.

15 Years Later

“NIGHT! Answer your mother when she is talking to you!” Leo yelled.
WHAT!!” Night shouted.
“Go out to the shop and get some meat for diner tonight.” his mother called.
Night heaved a sigh as he pushed himself up from the desk he'd been sitting at. 'Why am I always the one who has to go?' he thought as he grabbed his bag and looked down at the paper on his desk. It was filled with detailed drawings of armors for men and elegant dresses for women.
What about my dreams? Don't they mean anything....” he whispered to himself as he hid his work, and went out his bedroom door.
It didn't take long before he reached Mr.Low's meat shop.
“Night! Hey how ya doing?” Mr.Low asked.
Fine I guess.” Night sighed.
“Well. What can I get ya then?”
I don't know...Have anything fresh?” Night asked looking up from the floor.
“Yeah. We've just received three freshly killed Bison.” Mr.Low told him.
Hmm... give me about six pounds.” Night sighed counting out four gold pieces.
Mr.Low smiled at Night and started talking to him while he began to cut the Bison. “Hey kid. I know it's none of my business, but now and again I see you by the fabrics and you look so happy. Perhaps you should take the rest of that gold to buy some materials.”
Night stopped a moment to think and sternly replied “You're right. It's none of your business.”
He did want to be a Tailor, but his father would never allow that, and even if he would Night knew he could never be as good as the famous Turga Tailor Relina.
Mr.Low continued to hack away at the Bison and, ignoring Night's statement said “I know! You take the rest of that gold of yours and go buy some materials. I would like to place an order as your first customer.”
Night's tense muscles relaxed as he hid his new excitement. 'My first job request! I won't fail!' he thought.
“You see son. My daughter is a Cleric in training, and she says she needs some good durable cloth armor. Would you accept my request? I will pay you what ever I think it's worth.” Mr.Low sighed.
Night took a deep breath and nodded his reply. “I accept.
“Don't disappoint me kid.”
I promise you won't regret this!
“Then I'll wright her sizes down after I've finished cutting your meat.”
Night gave another nod and waited for Mr.Low to finish packing the meat.
Mr.Low was a Muris chief that also happened to sell some of the meat that his warrior customers sold to him. However, they weren't the only Muris in the town. There was the Blacksmith, the Jewels-men, and a few other citizens.
The two races lived together in peace, or at least they did here in this town. The humans on the other hand hate all Turga-kind, and would kill them without another thought if given the chance. Now, wars between races seem to breakout all over, and no one can stop them.
“Alright. Here we are.” Mr.Low said as he heaved the meat up onto the counter.
Thank you sir. I am extremely grateful.” Night smiled lifting the meat into his bag.
“And we can't forget this.” he laughed handing Night a folded sheet of paper.
Night nodded, threw his bag onto his back, and rushed over to the fabric shop.
LISA! LISA!!” Night yelled bursting into the door.
The woman looked up at him in shock and smiled. “Night. It's been awhile. What's up? You sound excited.”
Night set his bag down and walked towards her as he felt some of the fabrics. “I'm gonna do it. I'm finally going to start giving my dream a chance.
“Are you? Well that's wonderful! What made you decide?” she asked as she straightened some fabrics close to the ground.
The chief across the road. He's going to pay me to make some Cleric gear for his daughter.” He replied with an undeniable grin.
“Well that's great news Night! Good luck with your first job I know you can do it.” she smiled as she stood up, and brushed her dress off. “Shall we get you some materials then?”
He nodded and began looking around as he always had, but this time he was going to buy somethings. In the corner of his eye he noticed some rare blue fox fur. He felt the soft fur and picked it up. The next fabric he was drawn to was a vibrant blood red. He then looked for measuring bands, needles, and leather.
“That's quite a bit kid. You do have gold right?” she smiled.
Of course!” Night retorted.
“Okay. Okay, well this all comes up to five gold coins.”
Night shuffled in his pocket and pulled out three gold and two silver pieces. When Lisa saw his expression she frowned.
“Hey kid...Tell ya what. Take this stuff home, and you can pay me when you sell your product.” she sighed kindly.
Night looked up at her in shock. “You mean it? Why?
Lisa shrugged and replied “Everyone deserves a chance to make their dreams come true, and I'm not gonna be the one to stop yours. And besides you come in here to often, and leave sad too many times so just go before I change my mind.”
Night gladly grabbed the materials and ran to his bag beside the door. He put the materials into a separate pocket and left the store.

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PostedJan 07, 2012 1:26 am
Wow, nice work here. I like it, but I got confused when you said "Night". I didn't know that was the characters name. Anyways I can't wait for Chapter 2 o 3o

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PostedJan 07, 2012 6:56 am
Auralyn wrote:
Wow, nice work here. I like it, but I got confused when you said "Night". I didn't know that was the characters name. Anyways I can't wait for Chapter 2 o 3o  


sorry about that XD guess I should have made that a bit more clear huh o.o Anyways I'm so happy that you like it =D
And Chapter 2 is coming some time today o.- >w<

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PostedJan 07, 2012 7:14 am   Last edited by NobaNSoda on Jan 09, 2012 8:30 am. Edited 2 times in total

Chapter2

COMING SOON!!

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PostedJan 09, 2012 8:31 am   Last edited by NobaNSoda on Jan 16, 2012 12:59 pm. Edited 2 times in total

Chapter 2

Chapter Two: Troubles We Face

When Night got home he put the meat onto the counter, and ran up to his room. He instantly dumped the materials onto his bed, and looked at them carefully. A smile over came him as he examined the black leather, blood red cloth, and bright blue fox fur. He went to his desk and shuffled through on of it's lower drawers. When e finally found the ones he'd drawn about a week ago he spread them out onto his bed beside the materials.
'It's perfect.' he thought as he picked one of them up.
It was a cloak with fluffy sleeve cuffs and trim. The hat he'd drawn with it had been one of his best and he was happy with the boots as well. He stood and walked over to his large closet. After he moved a few of his old sweaters he found his mannequin. He finished digging it out and brought it over beside his desk.
Night then grabbed the black leather, and red fabric and held one up in front of the other. 'Defiantly red over black.'
“Night!NIGHT!!” Leo called from down the stairs.
Night froze and hid the materials when he heard his fathers heavy footsteps coming up the stairs and, to his door. He quickly laid the mannequin down beside his bed and sat in the windowsill.
Yes?” he asked as his father opened his door.
“Night, wash up! It's time to eat...” Leo told him looking into his room.
Alright I'll be right down...” Night replied.
Leo nodded and left him alone. Night sighed in relief as Leo shut his door. His father didn't like to see him doing things that he considered to be a woman's job.
'Three more year... Just three.' He thought silently. 'Can I really keep this up that long?'
He shook his head, and heaved another sigh as he stood and went to wash his hands for dinner. He slowly walked down the stairs and sat down at the table with his parents.
“So Night, did you bring us our change?” Leo asked.
Night flattened his cat like ears against his head at the question. “Of course I did...” sighing as he digs in his pocket to pull out the change and placing it onto the table.
“Night, how was your time in town? It seems you don't smile anymore...” Luna was saying before Leo interrupted.
“Everything is fine Luna, He's a growing boy and needs his space.” Leo answered for him.
Night sighed with a frown and pushed his plate away saying “I'm not hungry anymore. Good night.” and he went off to take a bath.

“We're going to loose him, Leo. He grows farther and farther away everyday.” Luna whispered in a sad tone (as a tear runs down her cheek).
“Non-sense, Luna. He just need his space that's all.” Leo told her once more.
Luna gazed up the stairs frowning with a heavy heart. She could feel the tension between Leo and Night growing with every day that passes. Her heavy heart knew that if she didn't do something she would loose her son, but she would never be able to stand up to Leo.

Night shut the bathroom door and started to run his bath water. When the tub was half way full he turned off the water. He placed his dirty clothes in the laundry basket and got into the tub. He slowly sank under the water just enough to let the water touch his chin. He moaned at the great warmth, and began to wash up.
When he was finished with his bath he drained the water, and stepped out of the tub and onto the bath rug. He dried himself off wrapping the towel around his waist, brushed his teeth, then went to his room to get ready for bed.
Once he got into his night clothes he went to his window and stared out into the silent streets of the town. He suddenly remembered that there was an old abandoned work shed just outside of the town that would be perfect for his workshop.
So Night waited for his parents to go to bed and then gathered his materials into his bag and left as quietly as possible. While sneaking across town he came to the outskirts and found the little building where he could secretly work.

Meanwhile in a far off human town...

Zane, Happy seventeenth birthday.” a woman whispered kindly.
Thanks baby, ya' know I wouldn't be sticking around here if I didn't have you.” he whispered back as she turned his light out and went to her room.
Zane closed his eyes and rested for what he thought would be the rest of the night.

His eyes flashed open when he heard screaming, and not just from one person. He jumped out of bed and ran to his window. Shock over-through him as he watched the Turga slaughter some of his closest friends.
No!!” he yelled in raged.
Zane grabbed a sword he'd just finished earlier that day and ran to Ziva's room.
Ziva! Ziva!” he shouted as he beat on her door.
Z....Zane...” he heard her cry from the room.
He rammed the door several times and when it finally gave away, he rushed in to see her standing by the balcony window.
Ziva, come on!” he ordered holding his hand out for her.
She ran to him and took his hand. He lead her to the back door, opened it, made sure it was safe, and told her to run. She did as he said and ran as fast as she could. When Zane couldn't see her anymore he ran to the front door, counted to three, and charged out into the flaming battlefield.

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PostedJan 09, 2012 9:47 am
Have you ever heard of spacing between characters? >_> It's so messy and unreadable otherwise. Likewise Space between paragraphs. You also need to seriously go over it too, considering there are quite a few spelling issues.

You also don't seem to know how to uses commas and other forms of punctuation. X_x I definitely wouldn't call you a writer, to be sure.

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PostedJan 10, 2012 2:36 pm
Verdeman wrote:
Have you ever heard of spacing between characters? >_> It's so messy and unreadable otherwise. Likewise Space between paragraphs. You also need to seriously go over it too, considering there are quite a few spelling issues.

You also don't seem to know how to uses commas and other forms of punctuation. X_x I definitely wouldn't call you a writer, to be sure.  


Dude I wasn't trying 2 b a writer o.0 and this is really only 2 pass time.

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PostedJan 13, 2012 9:42 am

Wah!!

Awesome work!
Very Happy

WOw!!~ Nice story! Although that I didn't really finished reading it to the end... but its good enough that I wanna make it as my 'inspiration'!!!

And though,
Good thing you're a writer / author / journalist / and 'Lore'-Creator Material!! Great Job!

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PostedJan 13, 2012 1:24 pm
Thank you Mistway ^^ and to Verdeman I did write this right just when I copied and pasted it the indention between paragraphs disappeared. I do love 2 write and was a bit disappointed to hear what you had 2 say 2 me but I take criticism good and try my best 2 fix my mistakes. And could you tell me what words I spelled wrong? Because if there are any spelled wrong it would most likely be correct if it is in fact a name or item that I have made up myself.
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